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Some people think it is acceptable to use the animals in any way for benfits of human beings, while others think it is not justifiable. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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the question of whether should
people
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use
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animals
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 for their purposes or not is controversial. many
people
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 think that scientists and
humans
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 should
use
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animals
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 for getting
benefits
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, others believe that exploiting
animals
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 for many purposes is not justifiable.
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 essay will look at both arguments, I partially disagree with the former point
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 the
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 of
animals
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 in both, developing cures and improving health. many
people
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 think that
humans
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 are not allowed to
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animals
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 for
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 purpose for many reasons.
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, they think that
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 have rights and
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 under
humans
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 the hierarchy level does not mean that we should exploit
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.
animals
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 have feelings like
humans
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, and
people
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 should take care of them like their dogs or cats.
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, in our modern world, scientists can replace
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 with developed technology or
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 plants to do their studies.
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, in terms of ethics and welfare,
people
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 should not anticipate
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 and bring them harm to gain advantages. other folks believe that using
animals
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 for many purposes has a strong positive impact on society. many doctors do their experiments and tests on
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 to cure many diseases and invent vaccines.
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, during covid-19, several pharmacists and doctors experiment
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 vaccine on hamsters to gain the maximum
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 and avoid the potential risk that could happen to human beings.
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, since animal physiology
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 to
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, medical tests can rely on. In terms of improving health,
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 have food
benefits
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 that cannot be found in vegetarian meals. In summary, using
animals
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 might consider unethical, and there are other facilities available for curing diseases and inventing medicines
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 of harming
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,
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, the
benefits
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 of doing experiments on
animals
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 cannot be counted
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