The given maps represent Grange Park in 1920 and the same park today. Overall, many facilities were constructed, except entrance place everything had changed gradually.

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The given maps represent

Grange

Park

in 1920 and the same

park

today.

Overall

, many facilities were constructed, except entrance place everything had changed gradually. Looking at the details of

Grange

Park

in 1920,

entrance

Correct article usage

the entrance

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and rose

garden

was

Correct subject-verb agreement

were

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in both south and north parts of the map. Between entrances in the middle of the

Grange

Park

fountain was built,

nearby

Add an article

a nearby

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tribune for musicians was constructed inter Rose gardens. In the corner of the

park

Add a comma

,park

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seats were located.

However

, in the right

part

Add a comma

,part

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glasshouse was detected. Natural habitats

such

pond

Fix the agreement mistake

ponds

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for water plants,

rose

Correct word choice

and rose

show examples

garden

Fix the agreement mistake

gardens

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were in the North-East part of Arnold Avenue. Turning to the details of

Grange

park

Correct your spelling

Park

show examples

nowadays,

Change preposition

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the left side of the Arnold Avenue

amphitheater

Change the spelling

amphitheatre

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constructed for concerts,

however

Add a comma

,however

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rose

garden

above it stayed in the same place.

Instead

fountain

Correct article usage

a fountain

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rose

garden

and seats were built for people’s comfort zone.

Rose

Correct article usage

The Rose

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garden

and pond for plants were replaced with

cafe

Correct article usage

a cafe

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and area for play. In the right corner of the

Grange

Park

glasshouse was reconstructed into

water

Add an article

a water

the water

show examples

feature.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words grange, park, garden with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.

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16Grammar mistakes
 

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175 words

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The given maps represent Grange Park in 1920 and the same park today. Overall, many facilities were constructed, except entrance place everything had changed gradually.

Some people get into debt by buying things they don’t need and can’t afford. What are the reasons for this behaviour? What actions can be taken to prevent people from having this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Full-time university students spend much of their time on study. Some people think it is essential for them to take other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?