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The given maps represent Grange Park in 1920 and the same park today. Overall, many facilities were constructed, except entrance place everything had changed gradually.

The given maps represent Grange Park in 1920 and the same park today. Overall, many facilities were constructed, except entrance place everything had changed gradually.
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The given maps represent
Grange
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Park
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 in 1920 and the same
park
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 today.
Overall
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, many facilities were constructed, except entrance place everything had changed gradually. Looking at the details of
Grange
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Park
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 in 1920,
entrance
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the entrance
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 and rose
garden
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was
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were
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 in both south and north parts of the map. Between entrances in the middle of the
Grange
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Park
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 fountain was built,
nearby
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a nearby
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 tribune for musicians was constructed inter Rose gardens. In the corner of the
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park
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,park
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 seats were located.
However
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, in the right
part
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,part
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 glasshouse was detected. Natural habitats
such
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 as
pond
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ponds
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 for water plants,
rose
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and rose
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garden
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gardens
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 were in the North-East part of Arnold Avenue. Turning to the details of
Grange
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park
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Park
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 nowadays,
in
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on
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 the left side of the Arnold Avenue
amphitheater
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amphitheatre
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 constructed for concerts,
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however
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,however
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 rose
garden
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 above it stayed in the same place.
Instead
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 of
fountain
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a fountain
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 rose
garden
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 and seats were built for people’s comfort zone.
Rose
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The Rose
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garden
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 and pond for plants were replaced with
cafe
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a cafe
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 and area for play. In the right corner of the
Grange
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Park
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 glasshouse was reconstructed into
water
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a water
the water
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 feature.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grange, park, garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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