The diagram below gives the information about the Hawaiian island chain in the centre of the Pacific Ocean.

The diagram below gives the information about the Hawaiian island chain in the centre of the Pacific Ocean.
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The diagram portrays the Hawaiian island chain, which is located in the centre of the Pacific
Ocean
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, and
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shows how volcanic eruption occurs.
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, it is formed of volcanoes, and the active ones are at the southeast tip of the archipelago, where Hawaii itself is situated. The Hawaiian island chain directly affects the Pacific tectonic plate, and because of it,
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plate shifts 7-9 centimetres per year. The chain began to form almost 80 million years ago on a solid, dense rock bed, and each island started to evolve after an eruption on the seafloor.
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a `hot spot' exists on the
ocean
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bed, which lets out a plume of the material called '
magma
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'.
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, the hot spot remains stable.
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,
magma
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spume forms.
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magma
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may originate as deep as 2,883 km below the
ocean
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bed.
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further
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eruptions take place, which build up the volcano. Eventually, the volcano emerges above the surface of the
ocean
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. Afterwards, the spume of
magma
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remains immobile as the Pacific tectonic plate moves in a northwest direction across it at an annual speed of 7-9 centimetres. As it moves, a volcano forms as it passes over the hotspot and
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becomes inactive when it has passed it. Niihau, Kauai, Oahu, Molokai, Maui, Lanai, and Kahoolaw are the other major islands in the Pacific
Ocean
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which are 0-100 kilometres away from each other.
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