Some people think movies should only be for entertainment. Others think that they should also have educational values. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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believe that

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films

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sole purpose is to entertain only

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others argue that

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contain

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values

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have

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films

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not only for

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entertainment

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lessons to a person. On the one hand, movies

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the most popular form of

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entertainment

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that are tired and

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from work or school used

films

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as their way to unwind and to have short-term relaxation.

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, they used the time watching to forget their problems in

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whether

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work or personal and provide space to decide things slowly. Families used

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to improve the relationship between family members and spend time with them.

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, comedy

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which

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make

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laugh and lead to producing happy hormones. Despite there is no deep meaning and no

life

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lessons in

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kind of

movies

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people

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are still watching it.

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, I believe that

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can offer more than just enjoyment and improvement of mental health.

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films

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can

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provide important information and

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the

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people

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. In

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way, not only they enjoy the film

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but they

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will

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learn something new.

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they have learned could change their behaviours and be able to apply

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them in

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real-

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situations.

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, movies about LGBT

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which

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showed

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that they have feelings like any other person and that they deserve respect from everyone.

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individuls

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individuals

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prejudice toward them. I believe those

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that

contains

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education

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lessons will pave the way to change our thoughts and attitudes

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different things in

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. In conclusion, I believe that

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not only

offers

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offer

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entertainment because

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can

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provide educational

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and improve our

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character

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to become a better person.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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