IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

Your local library wants to improve its services and facilities. Write a letter to the library. In your letter you should: explain who you are make your suggestions and explain how this would make the library better.

#library #services #facilities #suggestions
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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to provide some suggestions to improve the
library
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emenities
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amenities
. My name is Pramod. I am a university student, and I have been using
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library
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the library
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 on Front
st.
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 for two years. As a regular user, I would like to give some ideas about improving the facilities.
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,
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apply
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internet
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the internet
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 is accessible
through out
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throughout
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 the
library
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, it would be great if the speed of the
internet
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 is high. I need to do assignments for the university
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 and use
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library
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a library
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 computer system to do research and note down the details.
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,
due to
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lack
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 of
number
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a number
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 of computer
system
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systems
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, I have to
unitlize
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utilize
 my personal system which is not as
powerfull
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powerful
 as
library
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 PCs. By installing
high speed
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high-speed
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internet
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, users can access information faster which makes
the
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internet
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 surfing faster
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time saving
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.
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, if a few more computers are installed
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 it will not only reduce the waiting time but
also
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increases
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increase
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 the
lubrary
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library
 users. Thank you for your time and hoping to consider my ideas. Yours Sincerely, Pramod
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greeting and closing
Ensure the letter begins with a suitable greeting and ends with a polite closing. Your use of these elements is quite effective.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea. Consider separating the suggestion about internet speed and computer availability into two distinct paragraphs for clearer focus.
logical structure
Maintain a logical flow of ideas throughout the letter. Overall, your letter is structured logically, though separating the points could enhance clarity.
complete response
Your response effectively addresses all elements of the task, providing a complete and thoughtful response.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is respectful and appropriate for addressing the library staff.
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