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People are living in a "throwaway society", using things for a short time and throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead it.

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 for generations are no longer available in our time. Many people are now developing a habit of
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 their belongings rather than keeping them for their siblings. In
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 essay, I will mention a few causes behind
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 behaviour and some of the negative impacts that
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 doing can result in. Electronics, furniture and even automobiles are becoming more and more cheaper. Competition among major companies is rising, and because of that many of them are reducing their
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' prices for their customers.
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, on ,Black Friday Night costs of some mobile phones may drop down to as low as 10% of their original price.
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 can be a positive impact on consumers, they have developed a bad habit of replacing phones annually even if they function without a problem. If these devices were kept to their original value, many would keep their phones for two if not for five years without upgrading to a newer one.
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 impact can lead to several issues. Other than environmental damage, irresponsible behaviours may arise in the new generation. Disposal of plastics that are the core material of many
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, cardboard that packs them and electronic chips that operate many smart devices may carry negative impacts on Earth even though many companies claim they are recyclable.
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 type of doing may develop a habit of carelessness among growing individuals because they will always get a new product when cooperations do major discounts. In conclusion, discounts may lead to a rise in throwing
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 before they have served their time and
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 uncountable doing may lead to not only negative outcomes on the planet but it can
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 develop bad behaviours among people.
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