Many people believe that having a fixed punishment for all crimes is more efficient. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having fixed punishment?

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Many people think that the best way to deal with all kinds of
crime
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. In my opinion, there are many merits of fixed
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including, deterrence purposes,
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there are some demerits
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significant amount of money. Regarding advantages,
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a key role in
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the rate of
crime
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, if all criminals receive the same
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regardless of age or gender ,
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can make offenders think twice before
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, if all offenders receive prison
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can discourage them to a break the law,which indicate
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punishment
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crime
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before happened.
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the
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need to attend the
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the governments can
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a considerable
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amount
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crucial infrastructure
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healthcare
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system, education,
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transport. In terms of disadvantages, To
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begin
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is consider
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is unfairness. To illustrate, the
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should take into consideration the circumstances of
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crime
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the crime
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, it is unfair to make equal
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punishments between
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commit petty
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crime
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crimes
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as
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who commit
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can cost the authorities a lot of funds. To put
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, If all offenders receive imprisonment
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,
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can make prison more expensive and overcrowded.
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fixed
punishment
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have
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upsides including, deter felons,
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require to lawmakers to support
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financially,
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,
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are several downsides namely, unfair,
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and expensive
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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