The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of 

new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The
line
chart depicts the number of business
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and exits in a country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, it showed a downward trend throughout these periods, with a notable decline in 2012 and 2015, respectively. As the graphs
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, the dotted
line
represents the opening number with its highest start point at roughly 8500 in the beginning year.
However
, it suffered a significant decrease to almost half of it to 4000. The
line
continued to drop in 2015 and showed slight changes to 2017
,
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before it fell to its lowest point at 3000 in the final year. The second
line
began at the point of approximately
at
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6200 businesses that closed in the initial year. It slightly fell to 6000 in 201 before it rose to 7000. The trend plunged sharply to nearly 500 and rose again in 2016. Afterwards, it almost remained unchanged until the end of the period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words line with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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