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Many high school students take part time jobs. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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There are a
lot
 of high school students
work
part -time
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 during the summer holiday. Some people believe that youngsters will earn lots of skills needed for adulthood; meanwhile, others believe there are downsides
of
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this
 trend.
This
 essay will discuss both points of view
Firstly
, we can improve
the
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our
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 soft skills in society, forming relationships and communication in
life
 that will be important
life
 lessons for us later. We immediately see that the billionaires
to be
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 able to earn a
lot
 of money, they had previously done the
work
 of the limbs to accumulate
life
 experience.
First,
we can improve
the
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our
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 soft skills in society, forming relationships and communication in
life
 that will be important
life
 lessons for us later. We immediately see that the billionaires to be able to earn a
lot
 of money,
they
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had previously done the
work
 of the limbs to accumulate
life
 experience
On the other hand
, working makes us a
lot
 of time and really tired, we cannot spend time with family and friends. It can’t enjoy a happy summer. We
also
 have the ability to be seduced by bad people or become damaged by excessive contact with society So what students go to
work
 will always have bad faces
such
 as seductive, time and health or
good
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the good
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 side is to earn money and learn more than books.
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