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In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

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In certain parts of the world, the younger generation is not using their right to
vote
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 phenomenon may result in younger
people
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 being apathetic toward politics and
election
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 results that do not reflect public opinion, and the most viable solutions are to educate younger
people
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 about the importance of voting and incentivize them to
vote
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. One major problem
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 is that younger
people
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 may adopt an uncaring attitude toward politics. If younger
people
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 do not take part in the
election
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, which is the most significant political event, they are unlikely to pay heed to anything related to politics later on. Another issue is that the result of the
election
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 might be undermined. Since only older
people
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 give their votes, the winner may not be the one that the majority want to put in charge.
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, it is commonly seen in my country that politicians with older supporters tend to win again candidates that appeal to the young since most of them do not give their votes. One suitable solution for
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 is to run a public awareness campaign to emphasize to younger
people
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 the significance of voting. Once they realize that if they abandon their right to
vote
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, the consequences will be immense, they will change their minds and begin to
vote
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. Another way to overcome
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 is to provide them with certain incentives to start voting. Many younger
people
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 find voting a waste of time and,
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, if they are given incentives, they are more likely to take the time to
vote
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.
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, younger
people
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 in my country are often given a small amount of money as a way of motivating them to
vote
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. In conclusion, the problems that may stem from
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 are younger
people
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’s indifferent attitude toward political matters and an ineffective
election
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, and some ways to deal with them are educating and incentivizing younger
people
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 to
vote
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratic process
  • political instability
  • skewed representation
  • governance
  • erosion
  • civic education
  • alienation
  • policy-making
  • accessible
  • incentives
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