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An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere for your friend to stay give advice about what to do and see in your area give information about what clothes to bring

#friend #holiday #region #information #advice #offer #area #clothes
Dear Maria, I'm really glad to hear from you and hope you're doing well. So, regarding
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your plan to visit my
place
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 it's a fantastic idea and I have
tonns
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tonnes
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 of information but I'm trying to be short. First of all, you should forget about
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 hotels because they
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 a lot and it's not what you need. Contact Jim! I've just spoken to him and he has an empty apartment exactly at the time when you are coming.
Secondly
, I'm sure you have been searching for a
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 the internet about
touristic
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 places.
Although
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 some of them are quite well, I believe that you should focus on
ski
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 in our Gorny resort. There are magnificent views and crazy slopes, especially for you. Oh, I almost
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 about the clothes you should bring. It's freezing here, so don't forget to prepare
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 harsh winds and negative temperatures. Please make sure all outdoor jackets are windproof. Lots of love and see you soon. Aleksei
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task response
Provide more details about the accommodation, such as its location or amenities, for a more complete response.
coherence and cohesion
Use transition words like 'additionally' or 'moreover' to enhance coherence when moving between the advice about places to visit and clothing suggestions.
task response
The letter maintains a friendly and personal tone throughout, which is suitable for the context of writing to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical and follows a clear order—offering accommodation first, then activities, and finally clothing advice.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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