In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel tor a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this .

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one of the most ubiquitous questions is lessons about morality and favourable behaviour in primary schools and whether punishment for their actions should be taken as an approach that might assist children in behaving
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. People now comprehend that
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play a vital role and
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need to
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their wrong attitude. I believe that
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and adults might use punishments like the prohibition
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cell phones or
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their
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. To commence, young pupils will be capable of fathoming what an individual may feel in different circumstances and foreseeing how society
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to their decisions. when a child learns to distinguish
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correct activity from an
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one, he or she would realise how to behave satisfactorily and understand
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ramifications of
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.
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, and owing to that deserve a good
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attitude
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, if pupils are taught about
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of fraud, the absence of
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adulthood is ensured. School staff with the assistance of parents must implement
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mobile phones and
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reduction of assessment results to demonstrate
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of bad behaviour. Undoubtedly, when a child is not allowed to use a phone
due to
a poor attitude,because of the importance of gadgets next time before any activity a pupil would think about the consequences,
thus
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endeavour
not to repeat past mistakes.
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young
person realises that it is bad behaviour that caused a low mark, not any other factor, a child is more likely to escape
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circumstances and actions. In
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, teaching what is considered as
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satisfactory
and what is thought to be unfavourable might help people in the future, and in order to reach
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schools can use punishments
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electric gizmos and lessen the mark of students.
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