Some people think that dangerous sport should be banned while others believe that people should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some individuals believe that hazardous
sport
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sports
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should
prohibited
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be prohibited
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, and others believe
otherwise
.In my opinion,
people
should have
freedom
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the freedom
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to play any
sport
they want regardless of possible risk. On the one hand, some members of society hold
idea
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the idea
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that the uncertain
sport
should
banned
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. they think
people
who engage in risky
sport
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sports
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are more likely to get serious injuries and even death.
For example
, every single day many
people
pass away or get horrible injuries result of
fall
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from
Everest
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the Everest
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mountains.
As a result
,
this
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these
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sports
can have negative impacts
in
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people
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life and reduce
the
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life expectancy.
On the other hand
, I agree with
thoses
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those
who think
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people
should have
freedom
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the freedom
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to do any form of
sport
for many reasons.
Firstly
, there is no doubt
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to advancements in technology.
This
is because there are many safety
equipment
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such
as
,
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helmets, face protection,
life
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and life
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jacket, which
this
tools can provide
high
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a high
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level of protection and minimize the risk of injuries.
Secondly
,
the
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extreme
sports
can contribute improve the economy of
host
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the host
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country
. To illustrate,
this
risky
sport
can bring fame and attract many tourists to the
country
.
For instance
, numerous tourists visit New Zealand in order to watch competitions in skydiving
as well as
climbing
mountians
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mountains
.
Therefore
,
this
can contribute to
boost
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the economy of
country
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,
this
is because the tourists will spend a considerable amount of money
in
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hotels, flights,
public
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transport. In conclusion, I totally agree that risky
sports
should not be prohibited, because there are many
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of protection
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protection
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equipment , and
also
this
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these
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sports
can enhance the economy of
country
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the country
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.
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