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eople are living in a “throwaway society”, using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to?

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Nowadays, people are valuing belongings less, using them for a short period of time and
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 trashing them.
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 is a result of their upbringing and products not being made to
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 a very long time. Throwing items away like
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 increases the amount of
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 on our planet leading to numerous problems.
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 with, in recent generations, people have been raised differently from the past. They are given what they want easily making them value belongings less.
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, a child who is given a new pencil every day will not care if they lose the pencil. Contradictorily, if they are given a pencil to use once a year, they will take extremely good care of it.
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, companies are starting to make their products less durable and sustainable to increase sales and profits. To put it in perspective, if a product lasts a lifetime, customers will not have to purchase a new one.
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, phones are now being made with less durability than before. Old models like the Samsung Hero, could survive being thrown down multiple flights of stairs, but newer phones can break with just a fall from a table. The more things being thrown away the more
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 there is on our earth. Having an enormous amount of garbage is a waste of space and can harm the environment. To remove
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, we have to burn them. The burning of
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 emits greenhouse gases,
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 as carbon dioxide into the atmosphere, which leads to global warming. The increase of heat is a potential health hazard and has been an issue for us humans for centuries,
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 is only making the situation worse. In conclusion, the upbringing of people is causing them to value things less, resulting in more
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 on our planet. The process of removing
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 requires burning,
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 polluting the world with harmful gases that contribute to global warming.

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task achievement
Consider providing more varied examples from different fields, such as technology, fashion, or household items, to enhance the richness of the examples highlighting the throwaway culture.
coherence cohesion
Look to use more discourse markers and cohesive devices to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs, which could further strengthen the logical structure.
coherence cohesion
Your essay presents a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion on the topic.
task achievement
The essay uses specific examples to support the main points, making the argument more tangible and credible.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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