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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to problems. Identify the serious ones and suggest ways to tackle these problems.

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Nowadays, the number of
people
 in urban areas is becoming increase.
This
 phenomenon evokes various issues in some aspects, with environmental conditions as an example. There are some efforts that can be implemented to deal with
this
 issue, which I will elaborate more on below. Regarding the problem towards overpopulation,
people
 would be more uncomfortable to live in there. It is because more
people
 in the place would generate poor air quality which is contaminated by
transportation
 use. The vehicle exhausts the CO2 which is mixed with the air and
then
people
 are exposed to that.
This
 condition would be exacerbated if
people
 continuously enjoy the air.
For example
, the elderly
is
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are
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 close to health problems
due to
 their immunity;
therefore
, pollution is the potential for old
people
 to suffer from lung disease. Turning to the solution, in
this
 case, the government sector must take action towards decreasing the drawback. Because
transportation
 is one of the issues, the government should generate a policy about it. Reducing the number of private vehicles and urging
people
 to use public
transportation
 can be a remedy to alleviate pollution. On the point, using the electric car will be more friendly to the environment because it is low in carbon emission. At
this
 point, the government can inform to produce more electric cars in order to appeal to society and consider a low budget to have it. In conclusion, overpopulation
results
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 negative effects in terms of the environment that will lead to a health issue.
However
, there are some ways to cut down the detrimental effects by imposing
people
 to use public
transportation
 or buy an electric car.
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