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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum duringthe year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show theresult of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visitduring the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum duringthe year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show theresult of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visitduring the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The above table and pie charts illustrated the sum of
people
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 visiting Ashdown
Museum
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 the year before and after its’ renovation and the degree of satisfaction by the
visitors
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 .
Overall
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, a significantly increased amount of tourists to Ashdown
Museum
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 was observed, after the refurbishment. It is apparent that the
visitors
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 were more satisfied after the
museum
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 was renovated. Before the restoration, around 74000 individuals visited Ashdown
Museum
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 and the feedback was relatively negative as half of the
visitors
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 were not satisfied with the old
museum
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, where two-fifths of the interviewees were dissatisfied and 10% of them were very dissatisfied,
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 about one-third of the
people
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 were satisfied and only a few
visitors
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 were very pleased with the
museum
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.
However
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, there was a huge difference after the redevelopment as the number of
visitors
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 escalated to 92000 with an improved satisfaction rate.
People
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 who were very content with the
museum
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 jumped from only 15% to 35% and
visitors
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 with fair satisfaction accounts for two-fifths of the total responses.
In contrast
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, the number of
people
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 who were disgruntled with the
museum
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 experienced a sharp drop by a quarter after the renovation from 40% to 15%
while
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people
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 with extreme dissatisfaction decreased by a half from 10% to 5 %.
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