In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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It is said that having
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home
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a home
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instead
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of renting once
extreme
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necessary for
inidividuals
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individuals
. In my opinion, owning
house
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a house
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provide
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security and privacy, and I believe
this
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a
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negative trend.
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with, there are several reasons why some members of society
is
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considered buying accommodation
is
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very crucial.
Firstly
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, having homes provide security for
people
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in financial and
emtions
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emotional
emotions
aspects.
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,
people
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who have their own
home
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they
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do not
to
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have to
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pay rent at
end
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the end
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of every month, which means
people
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can live without
worry
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about increase
the
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prices
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price
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of rent .
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, having private accommodation provide
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level of privacy.
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, there are no conditions
such
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as
,
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no noise after midnight,
no
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and no
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pets.
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, having shelter gives
people
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freedom
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the freedom
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to make any improvements namely,
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new
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garden, swimming pool,
parking
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and parking
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.
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, I believe
this
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trend can have negative impacts on individuals. To start with ,
purchase
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purchasing
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home
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a home
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is extremely expensive , which makes
people
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only
saving
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up money for
future
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the future
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in order to buy
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home
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rather than spend
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money
in
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the moment.
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,
this
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trend can put
people
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under pressure, which leads to
increase
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the mental health issues
aomong
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among
people
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like,
deperssion
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depression
, anxiety, or even
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suicid
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suicide
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, having
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home
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a home
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can restrict
people
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freedom.
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, if
the
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apply
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people
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want to
searching
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about
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for
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a better job out of their hometown can find it challenging. In conclusion, in my perspective, the
majors
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reasons
motivate
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that motivate
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people
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to
owning
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own
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their
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home
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homes
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in order to have
secure
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as well as
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privacy,
however
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, I believe
this
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phenomenon can bring disadvantages
inculding
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including
,
stress
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,
inflexibility
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and inflexibility
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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