It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their peosonal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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that getting involved in
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in either professional lives or personal lives is considered
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an essential
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. Everyone is the type of
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the risk seeker to find the value of ourselves.
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do believe that the balance will
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to the disadvantages way. On the one hand,there are several advantages to
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a risk taker during our career and
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daily
life.If you are
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entrepreneur ,that means a
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variety
of opportunities that you should determine which are
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important
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future.
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to know the cutting-edge knowledge about financing to make sure they can earn millions of money.
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exciting
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experiments to fill their empty life
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enjoy the feeling of
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adrenaline
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amazing topic to gossip
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other. Apart from that,it has countless examples that risk-takers
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from huge
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losses
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in both
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their professional
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and personal lives.First of all, many corporations face bankruptcy because of conducting business ventures.
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, business owners are likely to
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from
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the bank
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bank
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banks
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for gaining more moveable funds to maintain and expand
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their business
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.
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in
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the situation of
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chain which will lose everything overnight and
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loan
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.Second,Individuals who play extreme sports like
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mountain
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and sky diving,
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, still probably get injured or even die.
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the
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sum, it is reasonable
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is a
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sword, so we should beware
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level of
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but should not ignore the opportunities brought
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it.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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