Government should spend money on railways rather than on roads.

Administration of the
city
sometimes debate which sphere should be developed,
therefore
this
topic should be touched. But what positive sides we can highlight from it
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In order to figure out what is better, to invest in
railways
or
road
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, we need to consider all the pros and cons. Now, advantages and disadvantages of sponsoring
railways
and roads.
Firstly
, sponsoring
railways
is better from the
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infrastructure. The goods that
countryside
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is needed will come faster and in large volumes,
then
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without
railways
.
Also
,
the
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tourism will raise, because towns
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improving
due to
the gross national product, so the money
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government can use in ways to develop the suburban
city
.
This
is the reason why spending cash
in
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a nice way to invest money
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.
Secondly
, the roads are the “face” of every county, no matter
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or town. Because
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of people
prefer
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car travelling, so not only the main
road
of the
city
needs to be repaired.
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road
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can leave
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bad feelings about the countryside, after visiting it. Roads should not be underestimated, and it is
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sphere
to
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what should the government sponsor too. From my point of view, both should be sponsored,
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should find the gold middle from it, and develop both of them. Half of my life I travel by my own car
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because
car
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is the easiest and more relaxed way to travel
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, so my answer is that
road
is what government should invest in.
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  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
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