Marina has just started a new course at college and her tutor has asked her to write him a letter telling him something about herself.

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Dear Tom, Greeting to my all friends. What's going on in your life? So I was waiting for your postcard. I consider we'll have a nice holiday. Please forgive me. Since I can write to you a bit slowly. So after that, we arrived on holiday yesterday

as well as

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it was a little bit difficult to settle down. Because

this

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of reason, there were so many guys there. I strongly believe that I can make several friends without any difficulty.

However

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, never suffer who's friendly

also

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equipment. In our group, the rest of us, no one is good at chess.

Therefore

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, I tried to win all guys in a chess game. I think that it was great. Tomorrow we're gonna play another game. That's why, ought to work out enough to do that. I'm upset for a reason. Wish you were here, that's to say on holiday. I hope, next year, you will

also

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go with us. But I'd like to know what you are doing right now. If u can do that, please write with speed up. Maybe my view is that It is very difficult for all children to live far away. Because you will be far from your parents and u cannot see your parents until you'll come to your home. Best all wish to you. Take care of yourself. Kind regards, Shohrux

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

227 words

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Marina has just started a new course at college and her tutor has asked her to write him a letter telling him something about herself.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

The population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Why is that

Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do you think the advantages otweigh the disadvantages?

students should pay the full cost for their own study, because university education benefits individuals rather than society. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible.

Some people dislike changes in their society and in their own lives, and want things to stay the same. Why do some people want things to stay the same? Why should changed be regarded as something positive?