in some cultures children are often told that they can achive everything if they try hard. what are the advantages and disadvantages?

the way of
children
's life depends on many factors. One of the important factors is culture. Culture may come from the place of living or precepts. There are some cultures where if
children
have a hard effort, they can afford everything.
This
statement has a positive and negative side for
children
and parents. Naturally, not only
children
but
also
adults will try hard in chasing their dreams.
Children
who never give up on achieving their wants, show their persistent ability and confident feeling. It is good for them in facing the real world when they became a part of society or work.
Moreover
, by working hard in achieving something,
children
learn how to become disciplined and committed people.
For instance
, when
children
want to favourite animated figures, they probably will try hard to start by saving their pocket money until they can afford the figure.
However
, the characteristic of should get everything by trying hard has a negative side if there is no regulation or clear rules.
For instance
, there is a tendency to justify all means as long as
children
's wants can be reached. Absolutely,
this
will be detrimental to
children
themself and others. The character of
children
probably will be arrogant and less empathetic because they only chase their own purposes without wise consideration. In school or friendship,
children
feel always to compete with others rather than build up collaboration.
To sum up
, having a hard eagerness to achieve something is good but there should be a regulation path or rules. Parents have a prominent role in shaping
children
's ideology.
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