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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is a waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

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 a vast majority of
people
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 that the fund should be spent on the protection of extinct
species
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whereas
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, other groups of
people
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 consider it entirely negative. I firmly agree with the former view.
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, I will discuss both views in the following paragraphs.
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 with, it is crucial to protect indigenous endangered
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 because of their vital role in the ecosystem.
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, in Nepal Wild-Buffalo were an endangered situation.
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, the concerned authorities have played a significant role to establish Koshi Tappu Wild-life Reserve Park and they were able to save those
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.
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, now local businesses are increasing since many tourists are visiting to have a glimpse of those
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.
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, protecting endangered
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 will help to boost local and national economies both significantly.
On the contrary
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, another group of
people
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 says that the government should be wise enough and spend funds on the protection of human beings rather than animals.
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, some study shows that in Nepal millions of
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 are unable to eat better food
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 a lack of employment, better education, and political instability. In some ,places they are not even allowed to get primary health checkups because of that thousands of
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 are dying every year.
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, all the local and national authorities, national organizations and international organizations should invest their attention to help and protect those human beings to be victims. In conclusion, the low makers should be wise and smart enough to spend funds on endangered
species
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 which is the greatest asset of the nation. At the same time, they should be focussing to protect and assist those
people
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 who are extremely struggling for a better life.
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