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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foregin country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Ongoing debates regarding
purposes
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 of learning foreign languages evolve into
two
 opposite stands recently. I firmly back up the proposition that acquiring a non-native
language
 is beneficial in many aspects rather than taking tourism or employment as
sole
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 intention. On the one hand, the rapid development of globalization enhances the necessity placed on
individual
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 ability
of speaking
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 a foreign
language
.
Firstly
, intense personnel exchanges are increasingly frequent in our daily life, which emphasizes the oral skills of another
language
.
Secondly
, thanks to
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dramatic innovation
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 cyber-technology, citizens are hearing information globally,
therefore
, a bilingual speaker takes
advantages
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advantage
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on
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of
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 first-hand and cutting-edge news. What's more, the concept of Earth Village, with great influence in developing countries, is reshaping the public value as one who is capable to communicate in
other
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language
likely
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be
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 more outstanding than solely
language
 speakers. On the
another
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other
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 hand, many people learn a foreign
language
 with attempts to explore another civilization. As an external practice, a foreign
language
 actually carries its inner core as a different culture,
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 is why
language
 learning usually serves as a cornerstone for people who bears curiosity
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 the rest of the world. Japanese culture,
for instance
, emerging as a famous one for its cuisine and cartoons, spurs a great host of young
generation
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generations
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 to learn Japanese over decades.
Moreover
, indeed, it is understandable that many people treat tourism and employment as only
two
 engines for foreign
language
 learning since these
two
 cases are mentioned the most times in our surroundings.
Also
, with the amplification of
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needs
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need
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 to work and travel abroad,
further
 opposite arguments may
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not be established to deny the
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 power of
aforementioned
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two
.
However
, it is still too subjective and empirical to restrict the causes only
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such
two
 and ignore other elements. In
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conclusion, I strongly stand that there are various driving forces for the public to acquire a foreign
language
 but not only out of working and travelling intentions.
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