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Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities which are played alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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While
 people who conduct tasks individually are able to be concentrated and have resilience for time management, I strongly agree that group work could foster participants with more essential skills to overcome difficulties in the future.  On the one hand, isolated works
such
 as painting and writing are good to enhance one's patience and perseverance, since they need to focus on doing a single thing for a long period of time on their own.
For example
, J.K Rollin, who is one of the most famous authors in the world, spent a great amount of time writing for years before her well-known fiction book, Harry Potter was published. 
On the other hand
, globalization provokes an environment for people with different backgrounds to work together. In
this
 case, group activities play essential roles to cultivate youth with crucial skills including communication and cooperation. First of all, good communication capacity could clearly convey the thought to others and deter misunderstanding.
Secondly
, the team works allows young people to be open-minded and sympathetic, which is good for the acquisition of new experience and knowledge. Take educational institutions at the early age of children as an example, educators tend to let students work together as a team to complete tasks, which not only could help kids to get familiar with their peers but be able to access different perspectives. To summarise, despite that participants are able to improve their professional performance
while
 working individually, it is inevitable that the influence of globalization will continue to grow,
therefore
, I believe that it is crucial to gain various capacities from group activities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaboration
  • problem-solving
  • decision-making
  • leadership
  • interpersonal skills
  • teamwork
  • belonging
  • learning from others
  • responsibility
  • accountability
  • self-discipline
  • self-motivation
  • personal reflection
  • introspection
  • independence
  • self-reliance
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