The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.
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The provided pie charts illustrate the proportion of annual sources of income and
expense
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expenses
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of the United States of America charity during 2016.
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with, it is evident from the charts that both
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the total revenues and
the expenses amount
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the amount of the expense
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are approximately 53 million dollars. The total revenue is slightly greater than the total expense which indicated that it is sufficient to cover all the expenses. The primary revenue source is from
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food donation, at 86.6%.
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, almost 96% of expense is
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for the program services. The other categories are much smaller. Community contributions provided around 10% of total incomes followed by the program revenue at 2.2 %.
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, investment income, government grants and other income are accounting for only 0.8% combined.
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, the USA charity only spends the expenses for other two purposes which are
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, and management and general for 2.6% and 1.6% respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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