The graph below shows how people buy music.

The graph below shows how people buy music.
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The given line graph illustrates information about how users purchase music by using 3 different methods namely
streams
,
downloads
, and
CDs
purchased between 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, the percentage of
CDs
purchased showed a downward trend
while
the percentage of
streams
showed an upward trend over the period. At the same time, the figure
of
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downloads
had
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remained stable. In 2011, approximately 55% of people used
CDs
purchased to buy music
while
the number of
streams
showed the lowest figure at only 5%. Between 2016 and 2017, the
streams
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services took over
CDs
purchased at just under 30% before rising to over 40% and fell down 25% respectively
at the end
of the period. Between 2014 to 2015, the percentage of
downloads
reached its peak of over 40% after steadily increasing from 35% in 2011. From 2017 to 2018,
streams
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services took over
downloads
at around 33% and it started to decrease slowly from 42% to 30% in 2018 eventually.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words streams, downloads, cds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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