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many young people choose to take a year out between finishing school and starting university in order to gain work experience or to travel. the experience of non-academic life this offers benefits the individual when they return to education.

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A large number of Young adults choose to arrange a
year
 for travelling or working before continuing their studies at the university. The main purpose of
this
 is to gain
experience
 of
work
 and they think it is helpful for their next steps whether study or
work
while
 some of them just need to take a break for travelling.
This
 essay will explain why youth must spend one
year
 to travel or
experience
life
 as an employee.
First,
nowadays the industry sector not only needs clever workers but
also
 skilful workers. The title on the certificate cannot guarantee the workers are professional.
Furthermore
,
work
experience
 based on a real job is needed to ensure the ordinates during the recruitment program.
For instance
, major Employers in the food and beverages industry are more like employees candidates with several years of works experiences rather than fresh graduates.
Next,
travelling can help the youth to broaden their mind and to reduce their stress levels. Youngsters do not know about the real condition during they study at school. They just learn and try to pass every test. In the East Nusa Tenggara Province,
for example
, someone Chruch youth choose to allocate their time to volunteer for social activity in a remote area for gathering and socializing the back draw of alcohol for the homeless. During
this
 ,activity most of them had been enlighting their perspective about
life
 and they feel happy.
Finally
, taking a
year
 out before university
life
 does not mean spending time on anything. Young adults can be more productive since have a
year
 full of good activity when they are involving themselves in travelling or working.
This
 is a chance to explore and select a future job.
To sum up
, I strongly believe that taking one
year
 before studying at University is a better choice for the young adult.
This
 is good for gain
experience
 in
work
 and exploring more about real
life
, so they will be ready to tackle the following college
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gap year
  • Non-academic life
  • Resume
  • Job market
  • Personal development
  • Broaden their worldviews
  • Academic pressures
  • Renewed focus
  • Loss of academic momentum
  • Career goals
  • Informed decisions
  • Soft skills
  • Communication
  • Problem-solving
  • Adaptability
  • Financial burden
  • Prolonged break
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