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The key to solving environmental problems is simple: present generations must have a less comfortable life for the sake of future generations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The environment has sparked a heated debate.
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 I accept that present
generations
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 must
use
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 fewer
resources
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 which is the most simple way to reduce pollution in the
future
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, I
also
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 believe that
people
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 should
use
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 fairly
resources
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. On the one hand, there are a couple of vital reasons why I agree that present
generations
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 have to have a less comfortable life for the sake of the next
generations
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.
Firstly
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, natural
resources
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 do not
last
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 forever.
Thus
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 if the present generation uses a lot of
resources
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, they will run out in the
future
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.
This
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 is lead to
future
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generations
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 will not have enough of them to
use
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.
Secondly
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,
people
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 can reduce the amount of emissions and waste in the environment.
As a result
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,
future
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generations
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 avoid natural disasters
such
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 as global warming, and melting ice at the poles.
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, I am convinced that
people
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 who live in
this
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 day only need to
use
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 suitable
resources
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. First and foremost, using suitable natural
resources
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 helps present
people
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 have a quality life.
This
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 allows the present
generations
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 to have enough
energy
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 to
use
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 and the next
generations
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 not to lack
resources
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.
In addition
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, we should invent sustainable
energy
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 to replace non-renewable
energy
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such
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 as eco
energy
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. In conclusion,
although
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 the simple way to make better the lives of
future
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generations
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 is for
people
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 must have a less comfortable life, it seems to me that present
people
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 only need to
use
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 suitable
energy
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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