Many people believe that the current system of both teachers and students will no longer exist the year 2050. Do you agree or disagree.

It is a common belief that after 27 years system which
students
and
teachers
use
will change,
they
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will never
use
it again. I both agree and disagree with that opinion. There is no doubt that about it technology will be used more than in
this
age.
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of ,
this
the
role
of
teachers
and
students
will change ,
however
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I think it will not change one hundred per cent.
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words
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we need
teachers
every time we want to educate qualified
person
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people
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. Technology has been improved since humanity started and it will not stop. Because we
use
it in every part of our lives
such
as transportation, accommodation, education...
Therefore
it has crucial effects on human life. It changes everything like the
role
of workers.
Teachers
are included
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these workers too.
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example
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in the 20th
century
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they have fewer facilities than today for materials. They could not
use
support materials like videos, images etc.
Moreover
, nowadays ,if
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teacher wants, they prefer youtube lesson videos so they can stop giving a lecture.
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example illustrates that their
lecturer
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role
losing
it's
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value and it will continue.
However
,
teachers
are not just lecturers they are
also
educators for their children. In other
words
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they are mentors of
students
.
Although
,
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their effect on student's academic life has
been
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decreased, their key
role
still continues and from the point of my
view
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it will continue until the end of
the
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human life. They will be
role
model
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for the next generations like they did
previous
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.
This
situation has some reasons, I begin with the most important one, the time which
spended
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with
students
. Most of the
students
see their teacher more than their family members because
,
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they spend most of their time in school.
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of
this
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they are inspired by their teacher. And if
it
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this
does not continue next generation will face with lack of kindness ,emotions , and these type of personal features which is
neded
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needed
for
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be
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a good person. For
this
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key roles ,I think, their mission will be protected. In conclusion, many people agree with the opinion tells
teachers
' and
students
' roles will
experiemenced
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experience
experienced
huge changes after
twenty seven
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years.
On the
contrary
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I do not support
this
idea for their key
role
in
students
' personality'
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