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Some say it is better to have vertical cities with lots of tall buildings rather than horizontal cities with fewer tall buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the
last
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 few decades, there has been a tremendous increase in the number of skyscrapers in
cities
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 some support the idea of multiple tall buildings in modern towns, including myself, some may strongly disagree. In
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 essay, I will discuss the practicality
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 associated with vertical
cities
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. One can expect a rapid rise in vertical
cities
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 in the near future
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 a shortage of area surface for the exponentially growing population. Delhi, the most populous city in the world,
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, has a high number of locals struggling to find a house. Because of
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, the government is introducing new schemes to build high-rise buildings that can accommodate a lot more people compared to a single house built on the same land area.
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, keeping space efficiency in mind, the construction of vertical
cities
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 should be highly promoted to combat the dire issue of land shortage. Another compelling reason for encouraging folks to support the idea of vertical
cities
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 is safety and security. With more public living in the same complex, guarded by security, lesser will be a risk of robbery and kidnapping. As horizontally built nuclear houses pose a significant threat to the residents
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 more isolated space, and community. In Canada, where one can observe plenty of skyscrapers, reported cases of burglary are far less than in a city in India which has very few tall buildings as many prefer to live in isolated houses. Thereby, one can say that a family living together in an apartment complex offer added security.
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 from the aforementioned discussion, I am a proponent of the argument that during planning a city's infrastructure and house-hunting, issues of land shortage, and public safety should be considered.
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