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many people think that mesuam and gallery should only show work from local artist rather than work from another country do you agree?

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Some people believe that museums and galleries should only show work from local artists rather than work from another nation. I somewhat agree, but I
also
 believe that there should be a balance between showcasing local and international crafts.
This
 essay will discuss both views with reasons and examples. On the one hand, museums and art studios that exhibit the history and culture of other
nations
 draw many visitors from diverse cultural backgrounds.
For instance
, the Vatican Museum displays artwork from various European
nations
, including some of the world's tiniest
nations
, to illustrate the concept of multiculturalism.
Additionally
, it would increase people's knowledge and confidence, and it would
also
 allow them to discover new things from other cultures. Building multicultural works
also
 contributes to economic growth.
For instance
, Mesuam and art studios get more visitors because of their design and aesthetic appeal, which would be a great benefit to the economic sector. People cannot develop additional arts if they simply have an understanding of their native culture.
On the other hand
, a few museums only exhibit works of art that relate to their own nation.
For instance
, the Sabarmati Ashram in Gujarat depicts Gandhi's attire
as well as
 how to battle the British for freedom and a depiction of a street brawl with a foreign nation. If we showed
this
 culture to foreign
nations
, it would incite animosity between them, so some things must be kept private. To be conclusive, both points of view have their own arguments, and I somewhat agree that the government should maintain a balance between the two, taking into account both our gains and losses.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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