In some societies, more and more people are choosing to live on their own? What are the reasons people choose to do this? Is it a positive or negative trend?
In many countries, as
people
turn to their Use synonyms
twentieth
and Correct your spelling
twenties
claiming
themselves as Wrong verb form
claim
an
independent adult. Correct article usage
apply
People
Use synonyms
are begin
more and more to Change the verb form
are beginning
choosing
to live on their own. In Change the form of the verb
choose
this
Linking Words
essay
I would like to give Add a comma
essay,
brief
opinion about the reason why Add an article
a brief
people
tend to choose Use synonyms
this
way and Linking Words
also
give the impact of Linking Words
this
trend.
As an adult in their Linking Words
twentieth
, Correct your spelling
twenties
people
would choose to live on their own because of not wanting to cause much burden for their Use synonyms
parents
. Use synonyms
This
decision will ensure that the independent Linking Words
characteristic
will appear significantly after they are going through Fix the agreement mistake
characteristics
this
period. Linking Words
For example
, in Linking Words
asian
country, the Correct article usage
an asian
parents
Use synonyms
likely
to take care of their children Add a missing verb
are likely
until
dozens of years, which Change preposition
for
is make
their children probably Wrong verb form
makes
having
Wrong verb form
have
extremely
hard Add an article
an extremely
time
Use synonyms
to take
care of Change the verb form
taking
themselve
after their Correct your spelling
themselves
parents
Use synonyms
died
or not Wrong verb form
die
taking
care of them anymore. Wrong verb form
take
Moreover
, by trying to live Linking Words
wiith
Correct your spelling
with
tehir
own, they will not only be independent but Correct your spelling
their
also
able to choose their own path without having to worry about someone telling them no or telling them what to do.
Linking Words
On the other hand
, the impact of living Linking Words
by
their own have had on Change preposition
on
familiy
with several Correct your spelling
family
families
child
can be seen as negative. They tend to forget about their Change to a plural noun
children
parents
because of Use synonyms
the
hectic and busy work Change the word
their
time
. Sadly, numerous of them are Use synonyms
also
not consider Linking Words
to
giving their free Change preposition
apply
time
to just come by their parent’s house. Use synonyms
Consequently
, their family connection will Linking Words
becoming
increasingly disjointed and fragmented as they are spending more Change the verb form
become
be becoming
their
free Change preposition
of their
time
outside with business Use synonyms
parntership
or friends rather than with family Correct your spelling
partners
especially
their Add the comma(s)
, especially
parents
.
Use synonyms
To conclude
, Linking Words
altough
living Correct your spelling
although
by
their own Change preposition
on
have
brought more Correct subject-verb agreement
has
the
independent self characteristic, they have not had the same effect Change preposition
of the
to
Change preposition
on
parents
with only several children. They should have more Use synonyms
self awareness
of their family, giving them Add a hyphen
self-awareness
time
to gather will Use synonyms
making
the connection more sorely.Wrong verb form
make
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