Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

With the development of science and technology, working and studying virtually from
home
or anywhere has become a trend.
People
become aware that
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and job
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can be less costly and less
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when they do it from their comfort areas
such
as
home
, cafe, or library rather than
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onsite. In my opinion,
this
trend can bring both positive and negative development
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on how
people
deal with their flexibility and priority. On the one hand, completing
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from
home
will allow
people
to be more relaxed and manage their
work
time
wisely.
People
who
work
from
home
will not rush
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the morning hours and compete with the traffic problem.
Moreover
, they will manage to do many other activities
such
as preparing for breakfast, working out, or simply driving their
children
to school.
Similarly
,
children
who take
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class
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classes
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will not have the problem to be woken up
abbruptedly
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abruptly
by their parents every morning just to get ready for school.
Children
may be allowed to opt what subjects and what
time
they want to start the lesson.
On the other hand
, working and studying remotely
also
have some drawbacks
such
as the distractions of unplanned activities or unavoidable situations at
home
that will lead to
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incomplete tasks or disorganizing
work
. Working from
computer
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at
home
or anywhere else other
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that
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office will
be
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free up
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pressure to complete
ourthe
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our
jobs in the meantime.
Therefore
,
people
often postpone their
work
to do other unpredicted things that
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during their
work
hours.
For example
, a female teacher who teaches from
home
will set the
time
to not only teach
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but
also
do the housework.
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Not
to mention the distractions from
children
after they return from school will certainly affect
the
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work
time
.
Furthermore
, students who learn remotely sometimes get distracted by their little siblings or by their smartphones. In
this
case, they will not pay much attention to the lesson and have difficulties
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in learning.
To sum up
,
the
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long distance
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working and learning
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been a popular development among modern
people
. In my opinion,
this
trend can be up and down
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on how
people
manage their
time
and priority.
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