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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrated the change in people's spend in Japan, France, Germany, and the USA buying bananas in a decade from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, the price fluctuates sharply in
this
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 decade. The highest difference is in Japan and Germany where the fare went up and down almost every year. In Japan, the expense peaked in 1998, at 3 US
dollars
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along with
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 the lowest fee in 2003, at 1.5 US
dollars
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while
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 in Germany the highest tariff is at 2 US
dollars
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 when it significantly increased from 1999 to 2002.
Then
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, the amount dropped and being steady at 1.8
dollars
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.
On the other hand
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, people could buy bananas at the lowest expense in the USA. The worth
also
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 remained steady over the decade. The highest rate of a banana in the USA is in 1998, about 1.4 US
dollars
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 before it dropped and has no modification at 1.2 US
dollars
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.
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, the French usually spent about 2 US
dollars
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 to buy 1 kg of bananas. But, there was little difference in 1999 when the cost fell to 1.5 US
dollars
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 and rose slightly to 2 US
dollars
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 in 2003. in conclusion, the bill in these four countries reached a high point in 1998 and a bottom in 1999 when the fare decrease dramatically from the year before.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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