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Some people think news has no connection to people's lives so then it is a waste of time to read news paper and watch television news programs To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many find it prominent to know everything about what is currently happening either internationally or nationally. Depending on what type of news it is,
this
 may occur in a dangerous way of perceiving the world. It is mostly elder people that are in favour of being manipulated by the propaganda
that is
 offered by television. In fact, many people think that it is a waste of time to read or watch the news since it does not have any connection to our lives. I, without a doubt, agree with the thesis. What has to be acknowledged is that it is hardly ever, that the government wants something outstanding for us to happen. Take the lockdown
for example
. There were barely any actions taken that provided citizens with the feeling of stability or calmness,
although
 different prompts were spoken by the news presenters. Society was barricaded in its households, among which the majority struggled with various mental issues. Not a thing was mentioned about providing help to these kinds of cases.
That is
 only ensuring that, in the long run, nothing
that is
 being said on TV is going to be accomplished. Whether it is the right or left side of politics it does not change the fact that newspapers, programs etc. are nothing but mortifying parts of an uncountable amount of lives that have completely no correlation with anyone's actual existence. It was made only to control every aspect of one's life. What has to be remembered is to never let oneself drown in the useless statements made by the rulers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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