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The table compares how much money they give to growing nations by the United States, Eu countries and others between 2006 and 2010.

The table compares how much money they give to growing nations by the United States, Eu countries and others between 2006 and 2010.
The table compares how much
money
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 they give to growing
nations
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the United States, Eu
countries
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 and others between 2006 and 2010. In general,
it is clear that
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 the
amount
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 of
money
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 which was given to developing
nations
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 by most of the
countries
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 went up gradually.
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;the US, which gave a lot of
money
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 to growing
countries
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, was the largest over a 4-year period. In 2006, the
amount
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 of
money
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 developed by the US stood at 9,8
million
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dollars
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, which was three times as much as that
by
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 Europe
while
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 the
money
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 growing by the other
countries
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 hit the lowest point of 2.8
million
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dollars
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. Over a 2-year period, how much
money
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 was given to the development of all
nations
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 was a sharp rise. The US giving to developing
countries
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 was 17
million
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dollars
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 compared to 3.9
million
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dollars
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 by Europe, which was 0.4
million
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dollars
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 higher than the figure for the others. From 2008 to 2009, there was a slight decrease
by
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 more than 0.3
million
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dollars
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 in every nation. In 2009, the
amount
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 of
money
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 grown in
countries
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 by the Us stood at 16.7
million
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dollars
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, which was over 13
million
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dollars
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 lower than that by Eu
whereas
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 the figure for
money
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 by other
countries
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 was only 3.2
million
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dollars
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.
At the end
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 of the period, how much
money
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 developed
countries
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 by the USA witnessed a gradual growth to 20,3
million
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dollars
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while
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 the
amount
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 of
money
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 grown up
nations
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 by Europe and other
nations
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 increased by 0.5
million
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, nations, countries, amount, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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