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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their work place at home, when traveling. Do the bed benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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 cutting-edge technological era has made it possible for several masses to
work
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 remotely at home and when travelling.
According to
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 my perspective, its demerits are more than its merits, which
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 the conclusion, would be captivated in the forthcoming paragraphs. There are some
of
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the
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advantages of working at residence and the foremost one is that an employee saves
travelling
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on travelling
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 expenses that he has to spend to commute to the
office
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 or to use public transport to reach the job place.
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, he saves a lot of money when he does
work
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 at home that he spends on travelling. To cite an example, if a person earns twenty thousand per month,
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 he spends five thousand per month on travelling if he uses his own automobile to go to the
office
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. If he does
office
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work
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 at his residence, he saves five thousand.
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, there are several drawbacks of working at home, one of them is the loss of teamwork as employees get online only through the platform for some
time
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.
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, they are unable to coordinate with each other using online platforms for a long
time
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.
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, employees get online on Zoom
meeting
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meetings
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 for a short period of
time
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, they cannot get online longer
time
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, which makes them unable to take
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advantage of teamwork.
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, if there is a team of more than ten people and there is an online team leader, it is impossible for the leader to lead the team even though there are several online platforms to communicate like Zoom.
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, coordination becomes unsuccessful in
this
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 case, which results in the loss of the organisation. In a nutshell,
although
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 there are some advantages of remote
work
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, its adverse consequences cannot be neglected.
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, organisations should allow remote
work
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 when there is a dire need
instead
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 they should allow
workforce
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the workforce
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 to do their job from
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office
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the office
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 considering its disadvantages.
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