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presents how many million people used various types of public transport in Milan from 2010 to 2014.

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The provided table illustrates the number of residents who often used various means of public transportation systems in Milan
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 2010 to 2014. Units are measured in millions. The total number of people staying in Milan normally use all the common rides available.
However
, the metro transit was the most used as compared to that of trains. Another noticeable factor is that
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taxis were the least options chosen.
To begin
 with, metro rides dominated
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the city for a period of
5years
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5 years
. In 2010,
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3.0million passengers utilized
it
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its
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 services. Since
then
,
it's
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 rate gradually increased reaching
5.0million
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5.0 million
 in 2014. Next , trains were the second most popular .
Although
 it began with
1.4million
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1.4 million
 people boarding it on frequent days and escalating to 3.6
million
. In
constrast
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contrast
,with regards to buses, it initiated with one
million
 residents in 2010 and fell slightly to
0.8million
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0.8 million
 citizens in the next years . Afterwards , it rose by a difference of 0.3million till 2014. Meanwhile, the rate at which others preferred teams continued to rise up , from 1.3 to 2.2
million
.
Also
 , among all the forms of
movements
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, taxis were the smallest medium used . Even though it witnessed an increase, it was just by 0.1
million
. In conclusion,most people preferred
metro
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the metro
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 means of movement
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