The charts below show local government expenditure in 2010 and 2015

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The two pie charts compare nine categories of Government expenditure retails (education, healthcare, pensions, defence, welfare, interest on borrowing, transport, culture and leisure and other) from 2010 to 2015. Units are measured in percentage. It is noticeable that the proportions of selling education and healthcare experienced a significant fall over the five-year period

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figure for culture and leisure and others saw a huge rise. In 2010, 24% of the average government expenditure sales rate went on education which was the largest pie chart,

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, by 2015 the figure for

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category had fallen by 3%. During a decade, the demand for healthcare by government expenditure consumers experienced a considerable fall from 21% to 20%.

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in terms of culture and leisure make, the proportions of selling

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category made up 2% in making the largest retails belonged to others in the first year,

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, next year period there was 1 present rise in

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rate.

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expenditure
allocation
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fiscal
increased/decreased spending
percentage
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infrastructure
public services
education
healthcare
recreation
welfare
economic conditions
fiscal policy
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