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It is important fo people to tke risks, both in their professional lives and their pesonal lives. Do you think the advantage of taking risks outweigh the disadventages?

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It is quite significant to take
risks
 in
life
 no matter it is personal or professional
life
.
According to
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prospective
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,
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the mertis
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mertis
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merits
 of taking
risks
 outweigh the demerits. Related ideas,
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along with
 the conclusion, would be captivated in the forthcoming paragraphs. There are a plethora of advantages
of
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 taking
risks
 and the foremost one is its ability to provide fruitful
outcome
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outcomes
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in
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a business's
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business's
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pespective
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perspective
. The firms take a catastrophic risk when they commence their business; gradually, by the passage of time, they obtain a huge return on investment that makes them pleased in their professional
life
.
Hence
, there are numerous benefits
of
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 taking
risks
 in professional
life
. To cite an example, Hero Moto Corp
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invested
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 a
catasrophic
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catastrophic
 amount of money when
their
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 establish their venture and they are earning from hand to mouth as
this
 organization has become stellar throughout the globe.
Secondly
, teenagers take chances in taking examinations for
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government jobs expecting that they would get the government jobs; if they pass, they get obtain
fruitful
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a fruitful
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 salary, which is
gift
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a gift
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 that they receive by taking rish
that is
 by appearing in
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the exam
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exam
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.
Nonetheless
, in spite of several benefits, there are some drawbacks
of
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 taking
risks
particularly
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 in gambling as people put a lot of their finance
in
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 risk and most of the time, they do not get triumph.
Consequently
, taking
risks
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a wastage
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wastage
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 of money.
For instance
, there are various methods to play gambling and online casino is one of them where
the
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people from teenagers to mature
one
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play and most of
time
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 they are defeated by
the
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 rivals, which make them there is no use crying over spilt milk. In a nutshell,
although
 there are tremendous merits of taking
risks
,
its
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 adverse consequences cannot be neglected.
Thus
, the legislation should encourage to take
risks
 from
healthy
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 point of view not
bad
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a bad
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 point of view.
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