You use the local swimming pool often, and during one of your visits, you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter describe what the problem was tell what the swimming pool staff have done about it suggest your own solution to the problem.

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Dear Mr. Wilson, I am one of the town residents who uses the “Splash”

pool

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frequently,

however

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, a recent incident I experienced at your

pool

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made me reconsider my choice of the

pool

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. The incident happened

last

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Friday when I was at the

pool

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with my family at around 5 pm. A small kid got out of the

pool

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for children and ran into the one for adults, which was clearly not suitable for him as the depth was around 2 meters. When the kid was struggling to get out of the

pool

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, no staff member tried to help him. If I

did

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not

reach

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and

grab

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grabbed

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him out of the

pool

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in time, the results could have been tragic. In consideration of

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incident, I suggest you hold regular training for the

pool

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staff about their responsibilities against

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goers,

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small kids, so they are more cautious. Please take

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matter seriously and announce the action taken in

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regard to locals. Best regards, Farman Nazarov

laman.nazarovaaFri Dec 13 2024

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coherence and cohesion

Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for improved clarity and structure.

task achievement

While the letter covers the issues effectively, providing more specific details about proposed solutions could strengthen the task response.

coherence and cohesion

The letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion that logically guide the reader through your experience and suggestions.

task achievement

You addressed the issue clearly and offered a practical solution, reflecting a strong response to the task.

task achievement

The formal tone of the letter is appropriate for communicating with a manager, demonstrating awareness of suitable writing tone.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

169 words

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