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Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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#Khusanov_30 It is often argued that the effectiveness of face-to-face interaction is more likely to be dominant compared to
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raised
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To begin
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verbal
communication
 has a huge impact on our
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 and in preserving a strong relationship between families and friends.
For instance
, an outgoing person always attempts to create a social group among their peers, and it could be impossible without speaking skills.
Furthermore
, oral interaction plays a significant role,
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in helping
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 people to be a member of
company
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the company
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. Nowadays individuals are being judged by their speaking skills which are required in terms of attracting people to their
company
. Provided that candidates owning attractive
communication
 abilities crave to be
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employees
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, they can be easily considered by interviewers
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 valuable
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members
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 of staff.
However
, face-to-face
communication
 is not always a preferable idea because of the fact messages are sent in a formal way. Obviously, the majority of jobs are connected with
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advanced technology, namely on the Internet, where workers have to send emails written to their employers on a daily basis. And every aspect of how work is going on is forced to be documented. To illustrate, some workers may find their work difficult because of the fact that they are not
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conscious
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 to use advanced technology.
Moreover
, if so, the
company
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some problems which can be found by employees
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 afford to function some of
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. In conclusion, it is strongly believed that verbal
communication
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Although
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 importance in personal relations, it is not applicable to office and
company
 in terms of writing forms at work.
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