In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?
Buying places where to live has become one of the most appealing luxuries.
This
is explained mainly by cultural reasons that have been inculcated generation by generation Linking Words
as well as
the popularization of investing in different fields. From my perspective, I consider that it has drawbacks and benefits, and in Linking Words
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essay, I will explain my reasons in detail.
To start with, from prehistoric times, it has been considered an honour to be the owner of many houses and landscapes. Linking Words
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, most people are raised by receiving Linking Words
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kind of teaching and they staunchly believe that it is the main goal in their lives. Linking Words
However
, there are many social conditions that prevent Linking Words
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achievement. Linking Words
For example
, in Colombia, most people are located in a socio-economic middle position, which means that if they desire to buy or build a house, they have to make high-amount loans and pay for the instalments for more than 25 years.
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Additionally
, one of the main stumbling blocks is that human behaviours change constantly, Linking Words
then
humankind could strongly desire to live in a specific spot, Linking Words
however
, thoughts and feelings could be modified by many other external causes Linking Words
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as workplaces, partnerships, relationships, etc. Linking Words
As a consequence
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, there is a lack of sense of belonging and people have regrets considering that they have made unnecessary endeavours in case of acquiring any properties. Linking Words
For example
, research performed in Mexico showed the increasing rate of houses and apartments that have been sold by the owners during the Linking Words
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decade.
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To sum up
, there are many cultural reasons that explain why many societies still believe that acquiring their own building should be the main purpose in life. Linking Words
Nevertheless
, many options should be taken into account to decide where and when.Linking Words
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task response
Consider addressing the part of the question where you discuss whether the situation is positive or negative more explicitly. While you mentioned drawbacks and benefits, a clearer stance would make the argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Although the logical sequence is mostly sound, a bit more consistency in linking ideas can improve overall coherence.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines what the essay will discuss, setting a clear direction.
relevant specific examples
The essay provides relevant examples, such as the situation in Colombia and research in Mexico, to support the points made.