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The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In
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 day and age, more and more people prefer having a quick grab of fast
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 or ready-made
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 after an exhausting working day.
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 some people fall for the advantages of
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, there are many others who beg to differ. I mostly argue the disadvantages of
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 an idea. On the one hand, a convenient meal is no doubt an opportunity to save
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time
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 for each individual.
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 to say, many people are going to work these days and experiencing a very sedentary lifestyle which hinders their
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 spent preparing proper
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.
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, if a family of four with both parents working and the kids going to school, a quick visit to a ready-made
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 store will save so much of their
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 preparing for
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 and beyond, they can have more
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 for conversation and relaxation together.
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, family members can have more choices of
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 since fast
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does offer
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 a wide range of dishes, which can make them bond better without starting any arguments with regard to
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 preferences.
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, overconsumption of fast
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 might lead to some serious health issues. It can be easily seen that ready foodstuff is not as nutritious as homemade
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. It is shown in some studies that fast cuisine tends to contain various substances that are generally unhealthy and high in sugar, salt, saturated ingredients and many processed preservatives.
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, overconsumption of
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 type of meal can cause some diseases
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 as obesity or heart problems.
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, spending on quick meals will cost so much more than self-prepared
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 and might cause a family some unexpected financial imbalance. Taking both sides into account,
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 is undeniable that pre-packaged
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 offers both good and bad sides.
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, after careful consideration, I believe the disadvantages can exceed the advantages.
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task response
Ensure that your arguments and examples are evenly balanced between advantages and disadvantages.
coherence cohesion
You have a good overall logical structure in your essay, but make sure your ideas are connected clearly and cohesively throughout the essay.
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