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The rise of convenience food has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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In
this
 day and age, more and more people prefer having a quick grab of fast
food
 or ready-made
food
 after an exhausting working day.
While
 some people fall for the advantages of
this
, there are many others who beg to differ. I mostly argue the disadvantages of
such
 an idea. On the one hand, a convenient meal is no doubt an opportunity to save
numerous
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a lot of
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time
 for each individual.
That is
 to say, many people are going to work these days and experiencing a very sedentary lifestyle which hinders their
time
 spent preparing proper
food
.
For example
, if a family of four with both parents working and the kids going to school, a quick visit to a ready-made
food
 store will save so much of their
time
 preparing for
food
 and beyond, they can have more
time
 for conversation and relaxation together.
In other words
, family members can have more choices of
food
 since fast
food
does offer
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 a wide range of dishes, which can make them bond better without starting any arguments with regard to
food
 preferences.
On the other hand
, overconsumption of fast
food
 might lead to some serious health issues. It can be easily seen that ready foodstuff is not as nutritious as homemade
food
. It is shown in some studies that fast cuisine tends to contain various substances that are generally unhealthy and high in sugar, salt, saturated ingredients and many processed preservatives.
As a result
, overconsumption of
this
 type of meal can cause some diseases
such
 as obesity or heart problems.
Besides
, spending on quick meals will cost so much more than self-prepared
food
 and might cause a family some unexpected financial imbalance. Taking both sides into account,
this
 is undeniable that pre-packaged
food
 offers both good and bad sides.
However
, after careful consideration, I believe the disadvantages can exceed the advantages.
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task response
Ensure that your arguments and examples are evenly balanced between advantages and disadvantages.
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You have a good overall logical structure in your essay, but make sure your ideas are connected clearly and cohesively throughout the essay.

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