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Some people think that everyone should have the right for free education. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 plays a very important role in an individuals life. Some opine
education
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 should be free of cost for everyone. I completely agree with
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 statement as right to free
education
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 give unprivileged children an opportunity to study and change the
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 of their family.
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 with, people who can't afford to send their kids to school will now have an opportunity build a
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 for their children they always dreamt of by giving them the required
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.
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,by making
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 free we are not encouraging everyone to study, but
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 enhancing the literacy rate of the nation. To exemplify: In some parts of Ireland, government has allowed free
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 for girls which has made girls more ambitious and increased the literacy rate of the country by 2.3%. By getting the
education
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, poor kids will get an opportunity to change the
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 of their family.
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, when a child of a poor family studies hard and become a government official or executive member of board. They can alter the financial health of the entire family.
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: In Bihar district of India, children are motiviated to crack government official exam to give bright and poverty free
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 to their family. In conclusion, I believe
education
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 should be free and treated as one of the basic necessity as it can help an individual to fight for their dreams and alter their family conditions by earning well.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic human right
  • personal development
  • nation's progress
  • financial standing
  • economic implications
  • poverty rates
  • economic growth
  • financial burden
  • infrastructure
  • social mobility
  • disparities
  • equal opportunities
  • literacy rates
  • feasibility
  • logistical issues
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