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Some commentators feel that grandparents should livetogether with theirchildren and grandchildren, while others say that elderly peopleshould beencouraged to liveindependently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.

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 some
people
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 claim that
grandparents
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 ought to live with their kids and
grandkids
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, others believe that they should live separately and independently.
This
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 essay will present
both
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 perspectives including
both
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 negative and positive of these arguments.
To begin
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 with, Living with
grandparents
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 with their youths and grandbabies has negative and positive impacts. Clearly,
grandparents
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 have
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solid life experience which can help and advise their children.
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, they are able to take care of their grandbabies
due to
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 they love them unconditionally.
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,
according to
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 research
grandkids
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 who live with their
grandparents
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 are more spoiled and happier than others.
However
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, it might be a problem because
grandparents
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 need a lot of care and they could be a burden on their kids
which
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 ends up having more responsibilities.
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, in developing countries, married couples who live with their parents, face a lot of issues which lead them to get divorced.
To sum up
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, living
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people
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 with their youth and grandchildren has many advantages and disadvantages.
On the other hand
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, Some elderly
people
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 prefer to live independently and away from their children and
grandkids
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. The main reason behind
that is
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 privacy which leads to having a comfortable life for
both
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grandparents
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 and kids because non of them will involve in the other's life. Even though It might have an issue, If
grandkids
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 grow up away from their
grandparents
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, they will not have
the
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 sense of responsibility toward their
grandparents
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.
For instance
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, in
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 countries, some
grandkids
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 cant recognize their
grandparents
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 as they were raised away from them. living seniors away from their children might be good for
both
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 sides but it might have a bad impact on their
grandkids
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. In conclusion,
this
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 essay presented
both
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 negative and positive aspects of either living
old
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with old
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people
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 with their young
people
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 and their grandbabies or away from them. I believe living with
grandparents
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 is very essential for growing
grandkids
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.

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