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In many cities, more people are living alone. Why is this the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, many people in the major cities, particularly in the West, chose to live alone.
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 trend and argue that
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 is an unwise development because of the negative effects on society.
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, we see that Western societies, and Eastern societies to a lesser degree, have an increasing emphasis on the individual.
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, facilities are available for single people wanting to do anything they want.
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 individualism makes a
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 independent of others, leading to an increase in one-
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 households. The reasons why a
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 should live with family are replaced by technology and services.
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, a lone
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 can video call any family member whenever he or she wants. There is no need for group protection and help, as services and DIY-approach has replaced
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 a
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 would feel freer with more opportunities as a single living, I think humans are made to form families. Families are the building blocks of society, and a trend of living alone will ruin society as a whole. Service companies and technology can replace practical issues and help a
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 living alone.
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, feelings and support from family members and friends can not be replaced.
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, more and more people are living alone in cities
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 the rise of the Individualism mindset.
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 illudes a
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 to think that he or she is independent and can do whatever he or she desires.
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, humans need each other, and family and friends are irreplaceable.
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