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At the present time, the popuation of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantage of this situation outweight the disadvantages?

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These days, the number of young
people
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 is comparatively large as compared to the old age
people
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 in some nations of the world.
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, there can be a lack of cultural and moral values but more population of youths can be helpful in the progress and success of the
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.
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, I believe
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 advantage far outweighs any potential disadvantages. I will start by looking at the disadvantages. The lesser of senior individuals in society may be harmful in terms of cultural, social, and moral values they can inculcate in young minds.
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, in Indian culture parents and grandparents teach children how to behave with others and respect religion but the lack of elderly
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's supervision can impact children's life in a negative way.
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, senior
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 are responsible to bind all the family members together but their absence can result in more nuclear families and
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 a lack of cooperation and belongingness. I do not think
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 reason can be seen as a major drawback in life because
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 like to resist themselves in society nowadays.
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, a growing number of young generation can be a helping hand in the progress and growth of the
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 because there will be more educated
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 to serve the nation in different fields. The advancements in educational facilities have made study easier than past because a lot of material is available on the Internet, in libraries, etc.
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, it can be clearly seen in our society that
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 are much more educated than in the past and there are chances that they can serve the
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 in a better way to strengthen the economy than older ones. I think that the economic growth of the
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 is extremely important because it represents the
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 in the world.
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,
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 the cultural, social, and moral values are declining with the increasing population of youth, I believe the downside is greatly outweighed by the upside that the progress and growth of the
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 are much more important to represent it on a global scale.

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