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As housing is a basic need for people, government should provide free housing for everyone who cant't afford it, To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #cant
One of the first ambitions of
people
 is to own a house, someone is lucky and they
maybe
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 receive it like a heritage from their parents others probably never have
this
 chance. In these cases, the government should help to give these
people
 the possibility to sleep in a safe place. In
this
 essay, I will explain which is my opinion and why
this
 argument is so delicate. First of all, having a safe place where you can sleep is vital for
people
. Life in the street could be really dangerous because of robbers, climate and hygiene conditions. In fact, there are a
lot
 of homeless that die every year around the world.
For example
, a friend of mine
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 in a hospital in Milan told me how the number of homeless that present pathologies during winter increases every year.
However
, there are a
lot
 of countries where a huge percentage of homeless are migrants.
This
 phenomenon produces a
lot
 of difficulties in the organization of help because each government can afford to help a limited number of
people
.
Moreover
, deciding who has to put money to help the homeless is always difficult. For ,instance during the
last
 ten years, a
lot
 of countries decided to do not to accept migrants anymore.
To sum up
, too many
people
 die around the world because they don’t have a safe place called home.
However
, some countries often cannot afford
this
 need because the number of homeless is too high. In my opinion, housing is crucial for
people
for
this
 reason even if sometimes it could be difficult, organizations like NATO have to find a way to provide a solution to
this
 worldwide problem.
Submitted by Andrea Barreto on

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