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The supplied diagram compares the effect of height which creates distinct zones of both tropical mountain and temperate mountain.

The supplied diagram compares the effect of height which creates distinct zones of both tropical mountain and temperate mountain.
The supplied diagram compares the effect of
height
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 which creates distinct zones of both tropical
mountain
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 and temperate
mountain
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.
Overall
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, The tropical
mountain
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, which has
higher
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a higher
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 elevation than the temperate
one
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, has two more zones compared to the other
one
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. Regarding the tropical
mountain
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, The warm
zone
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 which is situated at the bottom of the
mountain
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, is a suitable
area
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 for tropical crops
due to
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 its under 600
m
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 location. The temperate
zone
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 which lies between
warm
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the warm
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zone
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 and
cool
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the cool
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zone
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 is suitable for harvesting coffee and
cocos
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 plantations
while
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 the cool
zone
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 whose
height
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 is usually from 1700m to nearly 3000m. The cool
zone
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 is an ideal place for graining cultivation
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 the forest which is above the cool
zone
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 is a habitat for broad-leaf trees. The alpine meadow
area
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 is an
area
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 which keeps the second place of the
height
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, from roughly 4000m to around 4500m. The
area
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 is
also
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 well-known for living pine and firs
while
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 there are nearly no creatures
in
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at
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 the top of the
mountain
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 called the permanent snow. Comparing
two
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the two
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 types of mountains, there are some distinctions as the
height
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 of the temperate
mountain
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 is lower than the tropical
one
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 and
this
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 makes the former
one
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 only has 4 zones without warm and temperate areas. The bottom of the temperate
zone
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 is the cool
zone
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 whose
height
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 can reach roughly 4700m and it is utilized for
cultivation
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the cultivation
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 of grains, potatoes, and flax. The higher
zone
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 is the forest which is the same as the jungle situated at the tropical
mountain
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while
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 the alpine
area
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 of the temperate
mountain
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, whose
height
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 is from over 2000 to 3000m, is limited for the spruce. The peaks of both of the mountains are parallel as they are the permanent snow

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words height, mountain, one, zone, area, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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